Awww Pup boys! So I think you have a nice straightforward story here that’s very sweet. Just a few little details! Is that dog humping the other one in the second panel? I don’t think that’s necessary ha. In the second row, the face of the boy and the dog can take up more of the panel, that’s all there is so don’t be afraid to move in, maybe fill in the background to show that they’re in their own world. When they start to float you should simplify the street. Take out the people and just show sidewalk, fence, signs. And then on the second to last panel, it might be fun to have the same composition, but broken up into two panels again, and only in the veeeeery last panel do they come together. It’;s up to you but I think that both work! Also, in those last two panels the boy and dog are very similar sizes so the panels feel redundant. I’d like to more of a change in size (of the dog and boy, of the moon) between those panels. Its so sweet! I’m excites to see what you’ll do for materials in your final, and how you’ll build contrast!
Awww Pup boys! So I think you have a nice straightforward story here that’s very sweet. Just a few little details! Is that dog humping the other one in the second panel? I don’t think that’s necessary ha. In the second row, the face of the boy and the dog can take up more of the panel, that’s all there is so don’t be afraid to move in, maybe fill in the background to show that they’re in their own world. When they start to float you should simplify the street. Take out the people and just show sidewalk, fence, signs. And then on the second to last panel, it might be fun to have the same composition, but broken up into two panels again, and only in the veeeeery last panel do they come together. It’;s up to you but I think that both work! Also, in those last two panels the boy and dog are very similar sizes so the panels feel redundant. I’d like to more of a change in size (of the dog and boy, of the moon) between those panels. Its so sweet! I’m excites to see what you’ll do for materials in your final, and how you’ll build contrast!
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