Great comic! Very consistent style and drawing. The color choices are good and fitting the mood well. The handwriting goes well with the picture. I am considering if the text box can be white so there is a difference between the text box and the background. Also, it is a bit hard to follow when a sentence is divided into two boxes in two panels. Otherwise, great work!
I really love the way this comic looks. It's super easy to read because of the negative space and relatively simple shapes that you've used as well as the way you've chosen to place your text. Everything flows super well and the color scheme you've chosen works nicely and is easy on the eyes. Your text and imagery have made your story easy to understand from the first time reading it and I really like the way you use the rest of the page as its own panel on pages three and six. I agree with Joster about the color of the text boxes though. Although I don't think it has to be white, just a color that isn't also the background color.
Such lovely colors! Amazing clarity and super cleeeaaaan! I also really love your lettering. I wonder if theres some way you can over emphasize the moment the fiddler is turned into a cricket. Maybe you could darken the area around the house so the flash of light has more emphasis.
I really like the font and the colors. I want to see more organic shapes utilized in the background to give the story a little more depth/character. I also want an indication in the last panel that the cricket is chirping, whether that be in the gesture of the cricket or adding in sound effects or symbols.
Haha the spirit decides to teach him a lesson but was taught a lesson. love the dramatic in this story. and i like the usage of panels in page 5 where the spirit got squished into the corner when he got defeated. one thing confused me is the bottom right panel on page five. i suppose he is casting a spell, but the position of his hand made me thought that he's having a heart attack at first glance. maybe moving his hand forward would help
The first page is so beautiful. The fiddler's gesture is so elegant and it delivers the message so well, even us readers cannot hear the music, we sense it. The spirit's character design is well-done! I love you use green color for him, it suits his characteristic and his jealousy. I wish the last panel would be in a lighter background, because even if the talented boy was turned into an insect he still continues to play music, that is really moving, and not really a bad ending. I wish it would be a lighter background to show how the talented boy continues doing his favorite thing and spread his brilliant music.
Great comic! Very consistent style and drawing. The color choices are good and fitting the mood well. The handwriting goes well with the picture. I am considering if the text box can be white so there is a difference between the text box and the background. Also, it is a bit hard to follow when a sentence is divided into two boxes in two panels. Otherwise, great work!
ReplyDeleteI really love the way this comic looks. It's super easy to read because of the negative space and relatively simple shapes that you've used as well as the way you've chosen to place your text. Everything flows super well and the color scheme you've chosen works nicely and is easy on the eyes. Your text and imagery have made your story easy to understand from the first time reading it and I really like the way you use the rest of the page as its own panel on pages three and six. I agree with Joster about the color of the text boxes though. Although I don't think it has to be white, just a color that isn't also the background color.
ReplyDeleteSuch lovely colors! Amazing clarity and super cleeeaaaan! I also really love your lettering. I wonder if theres some way you can over emphasize the moment the fiddler is turned into a cricket. Maybe you could darken the area around the house so the flash of light has more emphasis.
ReplyDeleteI really like the font and the colors. I want to see more organic shapes utilized in the background to give the story a little more depth/character. I also want an indication in the last panel that the cricket is chirping, whether that be in the gesture of the cricket or adding in sound effects or symbols.
ReplyDeletethe closer in crops are really working and the story arch and text is good. The wide shots do not feel quite as resolved.
ReplyDeleteHaha the spirit decides to teach him a lesson but was taught a lesson. love the dramatic in this story. and i like the usage of panels in page 5 where the spirit got squished into the corner when he got defeated. one thing confused me is the bottom right panel on page five. i suppose he is casting a spell, but the position of his hand made me thought that he's having a heart attack at first glance. maybe moving his hand forward would help
ReplyDeleteThe first page is so beautiful. The fiddler's gesture is so elegant and it delivers the message so well, even us readers cannot hear the music, we sense it. The spirit's character design is well-done! I love you use green color for him, it suits his characteristic and his jealousy. I wish the last panel would be in a lighter background, because even if the talented boy was turned into an insect he still continues to play music, that is really moving, and not really a bad ending. I wish it would be a lighter background to show how the talented boy continues doing his favorite thing and spread his brilliant music.
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